» i need it the most. ...The specs of the rig are crucial to my plans for world domination by triggered responses created through visual forms of hypnosis and subliminal messages
well it is 500 word restriction. my initial review for EfBB had over 600 words and terrible pacing. i feel like i fixed the pacing in the re-write to make it less than 500. i suck with punctuation though, even reading it aloud doesn't really help. :(
